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Thursday, 27 March 2014
Short Sensory Recount
1 comment:
Anonymous
said...
Kyle you have written some descriptive sentences, but you did not use the format I asked you to do. The start was...
I sat in the garden. I could see... I could smell... I could hear...I could feel... All around me things were happening.
Next time you need to follow the format put on the board to help you Kyle. Good effort but you are not at the extended abstract. You are more at the multi-structural because you only used a few of your senses to describe things in and around the garden you observed and you did not use the format to bind all this together.
1 comment:
Kyle you have written some descriptive sentences, but you did not use the format I asked you to do. The start was...
I sat in the garden. I could see... I could smell... I could hear...I could feel...
All around me things were happening.
Next time you need to follow the format put on the board to help you Kyle. Good effort but you are not at the extended abstract. You are more at the multi-structural because you only used a few of your senses to describe things in and around the garden you observed and you did not use the format to bind all this together.
Miss H
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