Friday, 12 June 2015

The Fantasy of DEATH!!

        The Fantasy of Death
  It was 3:45am on the 25th of April 1915.  It was pitch black.  There were thirty nine other  young ANZAC soldiers cramped in a landing boat  with me.


My friend whispered to me in my ear ‘’Don’t be scared.  It will be okay”.   Suddenly…. Boom!!
I heard soldiers shouting.  I ducked down so I wouldn’t get shot. Then  I heard soldiers screaming.  I was very scared.


When I breathed in air I smelt blood.  I saw a flash of light at  ‘Z’ beach. My heart was beating really fast. My leg was bleeding.  I knew I was shot.  I thought I was going to die. This is the end.  I hoped my family and friends would be fine without me.

BY Kyle.

Reflection
I am learning to write an ANZAC Recount.
I am proud to find better words in my story.
I found tricky to find descriptive words.
Who can help me? My teacher, my friend and my self.
My next step is to write in paragraphs and remember full stops.


1 comment:

Anonymous said...

You have put a lot of effort into writing your ANZAC Recount. I am impressed with how you have sequenced your recount and added details to allow the reader to visualise what is going on.